tobot i finished ur book finaly it was a prety good book even tho ending is very deus ex machina and made me want to throw down but thorwing down is so awsome that i didnt even care
neways here is some things i noted 4 ur 2nd edition just because i am a VERY NICE SPECIAL FRIEND like VARGOMAX V VARGOMAX :
* p. 91: inside parentheses in bottom paragraph "...occupied by vagrants who MY eventually take ownership..."
*p. 111: did u realy want ACTUAL CRIME DRAMA to win "two Grammy awards" or did u want EMMY awards or what the r u trying to b funy or something
*p. 147: 1st sentence of bottom para "I...shrug and takeS a bite of the chard..."
*p. 152: at the end of footnote 1: "...the possibility that we ourselves OUR may be merely characters in novels right now..."
*p. 155: at sentence continued at top of page "...the others, who are, incidentally asleep..." [u dont need that comma after who are {haha i am a mean edit!!!!}]
*p. 165: in footnote 4 final sentence "...which could never be found the cold sterility of the centimetre and other units of science." mb u wanted a WITH after FOUND i dont no jeez
*p. 168: end of second to last para "...but many business..."
*p. 172: bottom second to last sentence "...nobody is going to really go to the mirror to look IT him- or herself..."
and the best correction of them all *p. 233: middle of page "Then the elevator dusts off its bell, DISUSED FOR TWO HUNDRED YEARS, to chime its 'We're here!' ding." BUT on p. 158, (less than two hundred years ago), at topish of page, "A few seconds later, the elevator plays its battle cry DING..." WHAT ARE YOU TRYING TO PULL HERE TOBOT WE R NOT SUCKERS JEESUS
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